User talk:Auri-El Reborn/Fanfic Draft 01

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The ArgonianEdit

So how are you planning on dealing with the problems generated by Mhira being a member of the DB? Since I'd assume they didn't just take kindly to his leaving If she doesn't know how does Mhiral feel about not telling her?--Ghurhak gro-Demril _{or TAO}^Yes? 22:26, 19 November 2010 (UTC)

In truth I had, for the most part forgotten about this conflict in characters. I then looked again at Mhiral's information and realized what you pointed out. Neither of them have any true knowledge about the other, as they need not for the house is open to all in need (it is a Manor, with five floors as shall be detailed later on as I make more edits. They have given little thought to each other, though eventually they shall. How the revelation of Mhiral's Dark Brotherhood membership shall effect their relationship is to be told later on when the plot begins to culminate. This will become more clear as the story progresses. Also, who are we assuming is female, Ajeenum or Mhiral? Much thanks again for the help. Auri-El 17:10, 20 November 2010 (UTC)

Neither? If you mean "how does she feel about this guy living in the same house as Mhiral?" I was wondering how Mhira felt.--Ghurhak gro-Demril _{or TAO}^Yes? 17:17, 21 November 2010 (UTC)

OHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!! I had a blonde moment, sorry. :D That too will be explained. Part One will only have Five Chapters (its an introduction section). The third chapter of part two will involve Ajeenum, Mhiral, Mhira, and a new guest named Amelia Norben (introduced in the second chapter, she was the Imperial woman who attacks Ajeenum-Kali). Like I said before, how these revelations effect the relationships of the three is to be told at a later chapter (as of I right now I would mark this to be in Part Three). Anyway, hope that helps and have a joyous day! :D Auri-El Reborn

No big deal, I forgot to put a period which changed the meaning. I look forward to seeing more soon!--Ghurhak gro-Demril _{or TAO}^Yes? 21:48, 21 November 2010 (UTC)